Sunday, February 22, 2009

A Mysterious Meeting

Felix didn't sleep that night. He lay awake in his tunnel listening to the mice and rats mingle and the cold wind blowing past the entrance. At around five, Felix stood up and dizzily looked around his tunnel. He processed the events of the previous night, contemplating whether or not the mysterious man in the church was actually real. Felix shuffled out of his tunnel pulling his raggedy jacket closer to himself as he headed out to Rouse Blvd.

The streets were empty this early in the morning, and as he plowed through the snow towards the deserted playground he wondered if he was the only one in town. When Felix arrived at the playground he wasn't surprised to find he was the only one there, he was still quite early. Felix stared into the perfect white snow that blanketed the ground, too new to be destroyed by footprints and sleds from children's play. Felix sat in a daze until he heard the light crunch of footsteps behind him. He turned and found standing with a smirk the man he had met in the church the night before. Felix didn't feel the need to say anything, but looked curiously at the brown paper bag the man held in his hands. The man sat down on the bench next to Felix, placed the bag on the ground, stood up, and left. Felix stared after the man as he disappeared into the sunrise, the light reflecting off the snow and blinding him momentarily.

Felix looked down at the bag for awhile, he then found himself picking up the bag and walking off towards the alley that led back the Rouse. As Felix made his way in a daze down the alley he noticed a woman approaching from the opposite direction. She tensed when she saw him and looked visibly nervous. Felix tried his best not to make any sudden movements and when they passed he whispered a soft greeting, then made his way hurriedly passed, not knowing what her reaction would be. Surprisingly, she turned to him and asked if he was hungry. Till that point Felix was not aware of his growing hunger, and looked back at the stranger with an affirmative look. The woman nodded understandingly and walked back towards him muttering softly about a diner up the street.

Felix sat in the warm diner looking around at the bright lights and comfortably decor. He stole a glace at the lady sitting across from him, not quite sure what he was supposed to do. A waitress appeared with two mugs of steaming coffee and a couple of menus. June, who only now mentioned her name to Felix, told him he could order anything he liked. Felix looked at the jumble of words on the plastic book with glazed eyes. June, understanding Felix's confusion told the waitress to bring them a couple plates of pancakes with some bacon on the side. Felix and June sat in silence until their food was ready than ate without a word. After June had paid the bill, they stood up and made their way out of the diner, each going their separate ways, Felix hadn't said a word to her, but gave her a look of thanks as he headed off towards his tunnel.

Felix didn't know how to react to the strange woman, no one had ever done something so nice for him, I mean sure there would be the occasional passer-by who would give him some spare change, but normally people were weary to spend more than a few seconds in his presence.

In the mist of all that had happened, Felix had completely forgotten about the mysterious man and the paper bag that Felix still grasped tightly in his hand. And when Felix returned to his tunnel, he sat down and opened the bag only to discover it contained a hand gun.

4 comments:

  1. I really liked the opening sentence for this post...the way you describe Felix's surroundings is full of imagery that definitely puts a picture of Felix into the reader's head.

    Learning a little bit about Felix's past might help with his development-why can't he read? Why does he live in the tunnel?

    The suspense about the mysterious man keeps the reader interested..."And when Felix returned to his tunnel, he sat down ad opened the bag only yo discover it contained a hand gun." I like that aspect of this character a lot!

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  2. 1. "Felix had become accustomed to sharing his home with the lovely little creatures." i like the sarcasm and cynicism in this line and i think you should try to develop that a little more since he's a bum and all.
    2. too much description, not leaving the reader with enough mystery, but not developing the mystery that's there. like, how did felix become a bum? you shouldn't have characters pop in and out, like develop them for one post and when they aren't the character of the week, just ditch them. it's awkward to read.
    3. i like the whole thing with the mysterious man and it's an interesting storyline

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  3. I love the interactions between your character and the others. Your blog flows between weeks very well and I think you accomplished this well with the mysterious man. Your character is very well-developed and I want to see how he will interact with the characters just introduced.
    After reading the above posts I would like some background / history on Felix. And also maybe a little shorter, let the audience use their imagination sometimes.
    I don't really see how Felix is trapped in society but free in his thoughts, but I do see how he loves human companionship and this is what he aims for. Maybe develop this more...

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  4. Felix is the tunnel, he takes what comes and goes in his. The addition of the gun is a good one because now it seems he must make some kind of choice rather than be lead. Good. Also, perhaps a bit less telling and more showing - like when you introduce each day, the rats/mice etc. works well. Does he smell? Does he have bags he carries?

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